When you hold me,
When you embrace me,
I often worry, if you will
leave me?
No matter how strong,
Our relationship is along,
Deep down there’s a gloomy
song.
I know your love is true,
My heart always draws a
picture of you.
But why is the certainty
so blue?
Oh! My love, your clinging
to the past,
Will never set us apart,
If your love for me is
true to last.
I have a heart which is
filled with love and care,
I don’t want to be a
passing affair,
Give me a chance which is
fare.
I am different, as all individuals,
I have my own persona and
principles,
I won’t be ashamed to call
myself as an ‘original’.
Acceptance prevails, if
from both ends,
I did it, now it’s your
bend,
Hope our hearts now
befriends.
Wishing ‘you and me’ are forever,
Which we would always
treasure,
And the agony in my heart
is over.
A new day full with bright
light,
Will certainly uplift our
love in right,
Here for again, my heart
to your heart makes an invite.
If verses taken separately then it is nice. but if I take it as a whole then I think sequence of verses could be better otherwise it is well written. And one more thing I would like to point out, in the verse starting "I am different, as all are individuals" is quite confusing. I think the verb "are" should not be here. and in next line " I have my own persona and principals" here "principles" makes the sense.
ReplyDeleteHey Anuj, thanks for your comments, have corrected my mistakes but wouldn't like to change the sequence of verses :)
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